Open mic... Er1 invited

[GreenBat]

I hustle wit da muscle of Hulk go check my bulk/
Get hit wit a deadly jolt & sommersault/
I been buzy I been spinning niggaz dizzy/
Wit a name that's synonymous wit being more than grizzly/
I was raised on all Grey's Anatomy blades/
To pump designer plagues into da veins of snakes/
I switch & exchange remains wit apes/
I come up wit da weirdest & strangest shapes/
See me i'm a little bit short o' stash/
So i want what your son & daughter has/
Smoke a half a pound of hash then i pour on a mask/
And walk into a store wit an order for cash/
I'm a Ghetto Born Bastard hazards i've mastered/
Only reason that i let you across is to get blasted/
Close your casket get in that basket/
I bet it's no picnic getting that ass whipped/
I swore to da Raw that i'll neva drink asprin/
My threshold for pain is slalom ski-ing down Aspen/
Smooth neva rasping groupies be gasping/
You'll neva find a has-been smelling like Jasmine//

[Anthony]

i open mics like the first man he slept with
you couldn't touch me if your imaginary hands were prosthetic
you walkin with a giant like man in prehistory
listen duck face under pressure i force gravity
y'all condoleeza white rice, let's play catch up (ketchup)
step up i'll F... one (F1) like windows boot setup
your criminal record's produced by timbo - misdemeanours
you get punched in a cell like nokia calculators

[GreenBat]

I moonwalk back & forth i'm back for da fourth/
Time nominated a reformed Oliver North/
To make more haste less waste on straights that
doesn't swerve doesn't merge & murders more than
dozen smurfs/
Each & every verse prefers drama as well hit wonders
went off one under da belt/
Puts my real age closer to a hundred & twelve/
That's how i come to expect no real comfort in hell/
Some'll rebel but some of us'll want to excel/
So lyrically my size ties wit double XL/
Now how da fuck can i not be inlove wit myself?/
Man listen da distance is in direct proportion/
Da opposite o' clarity you'll find is distortion/
Up yours you assholes is far from important/
I got a reckless death wish departed from caution/
I got marked for abortion but escaoed da womb/
So today i tear da roof off when i shake da room//

[Perveted MOnk]

Verbal versatility...fundamentals every delivery...
herbal artillery...expands the mentals density...
global verbal art deployment beyond the grasp of your tongue's movement...
its heavy knowledge omnipotent beyond the grasp of high logistic investment...
its explicit content...sentimental vowel & consonant lament...
why the fuck should i repent..
im a fallen demon stuck in a body as punishment...
so preposterous...when I lyrically cook...
my forefather must have read a forbidden book...
me & him had this common boisterous look...
but your poems are experiencing a rampant inflation...
flapping your jaws but still deprived logical comprehension...
go back to using clay figures as a means of expression...
you sperm cell-ovum evolved entity...
treating rap as a license to ramble on wordily...
your system-embracing circuit is destructive...
bit-by-bit self-annihilative...
but you dealing with poetry irreversibly repulsive...
non-identically repetitive...
If i die...fuck my body...cut my tongue & put it in the hearse...
writing method is a network of loose talk tightening to verse...
meaning when I freestyle...like crushed mealies I ace...
entering a mode where I verbalize anything with grace...
the passion salivating all over your face...what...

[rob_one]

Can we PLEASE ban holding a dictionary over your computer and shaking it really hard until a whole lot of words splurge out onto the page?

treating rap as a license to ramble on wordily...

You're not kidding.

[Perveted MOnk]

look man, im aways willing to accept constructive criticism & ways of improving lyrically or vocabulary

which brings me to the question, are you speaking in general , just this particular written or a specific sentence maybe? ^^

[GreenBat]

It's official my flow so sick it's got a fever/
It's days months & years later & still just as eager/
Da hottest thing next to da sun is me right now/
But i'm still on da block you like what da fuck how?/
Is he crazy?How can he be more ghost than Swayze?/
He don't even network/
He don't even estimate da sum of his net worth/
He don't give a fuck if he's in stores or on da net first/
Wit every copy you purch da copyrighting gets worse/
Bootleggers see a pool & just jump in head first/
My words inflate inside their skull 'till their heads bursts/
Only once I neva say what I mean twice/
My DNA structure could instigate a gene splice/
& wit a mind so ablaze I need an ice age to cool it off/
Got sixty-three minute tasks wit thirty left to pull it off//

[rob_one]

It's official my flow so sick it's got a fever/
It's days months & years later & still just as eager/
Da hottest thing next to da sun is me right now/
But i'm still on da block you like what da fuck how?/
Is he crazy?How can he be more ghost than Swayze?/
He don't even network/
He don't even estimate da sum of his net worth/
He don't give a fuck if he's in stores or on da net first/
Wit every copy you purch da copyrighting gets worse/
Bootleggers see a pool & just jump in head first/
My words inflate inside their skull 'till their heads bursts/
Only once I neva say what I mean twice/
My DNA structure could instigate a gene splice/
& wit a mind so ablaze I need an ice age to cool it off/
Got sixty-three minute tasks wit thirty left to pull it off//

THis was nice. Those little two-bar things you post are a bit crap, but this reminded me a little bit of Papoose. A little bit. Just.

[GreenBat]

Yeah i feel you man them two line rhymes were starting to get on my nerves fo real thaz why i stepped back to my original format.Got a couple tracks i'm looking to upload on this mutha soon K.

[GreenBat]

God forgive me i know that it's risky/
Instead of a boomerang i'm throwing a frisbee/
Jealous ones envy they so wanna diss me/
I'm so hard to hit so you don't wanna miss me/
When i apply da heat you get fried 'till you crispy/
I mosey on along i don't cry if it's just me/
Spitting these lines in the presence of cops/
They were looking but i'm not getting put in no box/
Filled wit bo-tox i blow rocks i'm still hitting mo' blocks/
I did what i did because they weren't giving no jobs/
To peops or creeps da likes of me/
So i got myself a crime spree right to be/
All that i can but then again all that i am/
Is water being stored in a u-haul van//
 

[GreenBat]

@ rob_one 'bout da papoose comment,is that good or bad?Just wonderin lemme know.

[rob_one]

@ rob_one 'bout da papoose comment,is that good or bad?Just wonderin lemme know.

Hehe. Go listen to Papoose. If you like him then it's good. If not, it's bad. 

I'm not a big Papoose fan (hate his voice) but dude has some lyrics on him. So good from my end, I guess.

[GreenBat]

Cool money thanx 4 clearing dat up Yo as for Papoose he ayite but i'd rather bang Big L or Lord Finesse since thaz where he got his flow from anyway.Good looking!

[OG Beezak]

I drop a rhyme like a seed to the soil
So you better gap your brains before I hit you with the storm
I’m heart core, I don't fake, ya’all soft
You can never match ma game even if you swallow erect cocks
Cos you seek props that’s why you write diplomacy
Bee drops jewels, you mad cos it's broke English
Just relax…. and focus on my delivery
Cos I can be the first Zulu to send you up to Calvary
Yeah that’s ma story B
Hip Hop got a hold on me
Sometimes I feel the strain, baggy jeans so you think I’m a clown
But it’s all right, I’ll pay the price, and urban culture will survive
You can be hypocrite and live your life in lies

[Sthubamajwe]

HAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA
*cracking noise as he straightens his neck*
Heh heh......just been to the "demcrackboys" website....................................heh he hehhhe eh tee heee hee.......whooooo!.......Cash man, yo'all is Christmas trees, Clowns!

Anyhow, Maybe I could join this again....
word Rob.............anyway......

I zone on a throne of stone and pelican bones
Listen to the wind whisper war in delicate tones
These celibate clones, fucking with me is beyond impossible
Obstacles, create diminsional barriers to opticals
Topicals, influenced by devilish meditations
Agreed to go to hell just to finish my education
Now Im Nitrogen, and I exist within a nexus
Thoughts so high they making Atmospheric exits
Cant stand the schematics, get slammed in spadex
Adressed as faggots, ejecting concepts from the attic
Fuck the A-list, I kick bitch niggaz to the bottom
Nitro not to be fucked with like holes through a condom