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Title: Rap Country- submit or criticise
Post by: Ace Blaq on August 28, 2006, 10:57:05 AM
This is not a discussion per se but a open mic session. I am new at this, I just wanna have feed back on sum of my content, and also get a chance to learn from 'wordsmiths' on how to write the perfect verse. So basically, there is no pressure on anyone to submit or criticise, it' s basically my learner's stone towards realisation.  :idea:
Title: Rap Country- submit or criticise
Post by: Ace Blaq on August 28, 2006, 11:08:49 AM
My first verse is from my song called "U R my SeleKta" by Ace Blaq (unknown), this is my second verse from that song

verse one

I found you, you took me in,
The forgotten child you said
Shall rise again,
You gave me pride- equipped me with my golden mic
Even though, I exceeded all your expectations-
You still treat me like a struggling amateur confined within structural limitations
From an infant child lyrically bound-
On bended knees- I pledged to be all faithful to the golden mic
Donít leave me now
This is Aceís hitch- hikerís guide to poetry and rap,
Struggling to catch my breathe
As you turned your back
Enter the lost rappers shrine, do not be shy
To admit you still a child, so teacher picture me
All alone,
Do you have the X factor- to the next big thing
No, no, no, I donít believe