where life´s going!

[Dawg]

That´s it rugged_man, u-town the place with the best sounds.

I want to know where is Dungeon_keepah, I called you out. Do you except my challenge or what? Hit me!!

Dawg Out.8-)

[huzzain]

yo katts, we will be here 2 rate this battl, spit sum ill shit.. holla   :-Y

[Dawg]

Yo huzzain, what do you think bout my riting?

I am just waiting to hear from the Dungeon keeper. to see what he got ,
as he says alot,
he must think I´m dreamer,
Yet i´m a schemer,

DawgOut.8-)

[huzzain]

 YO  DAWG U NEED SUM WORK ON YA SKRIPTS, YA STUFF  IZ TOO  TOO TOO SIMPLE. IM JUS LOOKIN OUT 4 YA DUN......    

[huzzain]

but yo dungeon keepah  aint postin nadda...waddup with that....
WELL BE WAITIN THOUGH KIDD...

[Anonymous]

Quote:

22-07-2003 at 13:18, Dawg wrote: Yo huzzain, what do you think bout my riting? I am just waiting to hear from the Dungeon keeper. to see what he got , as he says alot, he must think I´m dreamer, Yet i´m a schemer, DawgOut.8-)

your shit is whack dugeon don´t wanna embarra** ya sad a** believe dat

[Dawg]

Yo Chicken head

Be brave enough to speak your mind wen your logged on. do be what you are and hide behind the mask that proves your destiny.

Dawg Out.8-)

[Stretch]

Ok,

now firstly to Dawg:

You need better structure in your verse and actually have a topic. I see potential but it is clear to me you are a newbie. I´ve seen the lyrics of other U-town mc´s and most of them are cla**es above you. Make your bar lengths longer and use complex vocab(actually you almost have that covered).

Now to this a**hole calling himself Dungeon_Keepah:

I have discovered that you have some connection to Cannibal Warlock...Your IP addresses only differ in the last three digits...meaning either your from the same area or you are like me, on a network of computers. Dont even try to fight it cuz the two of you use the same typing style and slang.

For all those who don´t know, this Dungeon_Keepah aka Cannibal Warlock a**hole battled me and called me a ´biter´. He couldn´t prove it and still can´t...in fact never will be able to. He claimed that verse I wrote is his...how much more lame can you get?

Now there is my 2cents and I say get this faggot banned!  

[briCK]

welcome back stretch

[Dawg]

Yo strecth I appreciate wat u got to say. So if you willing 2 help me, I would appreciate it even more.

So what do ya think you willing to teach a new mc on the block and help him out.

thanks any which way

Dawg Out.8-)

[Anonymous]

Yo stretch whats up with you cat? U gonna help this doggy or you going to let him lie there in shame coz dungeon_keepah can kick his and maybe your a**, wats up with dat hey.

Dont bite - what you cant chew.
:-Y  :-|  :-(  :-Y  :-Y  :-|  :-|  :-D  :-D  :-(

[TKRocks]

Sup this is Stretch:

Now dawg,

Use multie syllable rhyming for instance:

Take your pen-and-flee cuz you aint got my pedigree

NOw if you take that line, check that pen-and-flee and pedigree rhyme in syllables when you read it aloud.

Also, try to come up with a topic and then write a rhyme on it. Try to think your lines through thoroughly and use wordplay for instance

Like a broken ´´cash register´´ machine you don´t make any ´´sense´´

Here you can see that I played with the meaning of certain words.

Now try take the verse you have here and write it again but this time write longer lines. I know you can do it! 8-)

[RuSh]

hey man where u been stretch?

[Dawg]

Yo strech

I appreciate it mate,

I am loading the revenge of this stench,
That hit me whilst I was quenching  my thirst sitting on the bench,
I was listening to that lark whilst in the park,
As it was getting dark I could hear the dog bark,
Hearing that was my que,
That I had to pay my due,
So I can to the conclusion that all this was nothing but an illusion,
That I was tempted to walk with,
as they tried to tempt me to jump off of that cliff!

How was that?
Please Reply!!

Dawg Out.8-)

[RuSh]

man life is f***ing flying