Bwoi.....look, I'ma say it like it is...that shit is whack. That shit is worse than whack. U need to work, mayne, stop with the simsynth and oscx3 and get some VST synths, those off pitch off rythym melodies of yours suck. Man take some advice, load the tutorial and cool stuff songs and check their patterning, go around the net download some hiphop flp. files from futureproducers.com or fruity loops communities. Check out the friggin help files and tutorials in fruity, that's why they are there. In my opinion u are less than a beginner, your beats remind me of my first fruity 1.6 days in '97 when I also just clicked away at the samplers.
Shit ask and I'll give you tips on how to work them fruity plugins and generators cause u seriously need them.