freeway shit

[bravo]

ait ait
me´s be the ghetto kid
deep from ekasi
grew up in porverty
but wasn´t doing crime
cause i new that
at the end of the tunnel there is light
now it´s my time to shine
my time to make right
tell ma mama not to worry
cause i´ma come through for her
cause i´ve been  motivated by my struggle
and her spirit of always looking up and never down
the pain of sometimes going to sleep without a crumble in my tummy
now i have  a chance to make up for what was,and is due
the peace of mind to know that everything is alright
there are no peeps like black folks
cause we know pain
and we gettin stronger because of it
now it´s time to write our own scipts niggaz
ain´t no one´s gonna hold us down
cause we are liberated and empowered
to do what we always wanted
to stand on our own  two feet
and  be proud and say this is ma shit right here!
:-P

[Stretch]

son your shit is ok, got potential, feel me? but you need alot more complex rhyming than that, up your vocab by readin a bit more. Use multies as well and you will go along way...

peace-1- 8-)