all r free 2 judge my story

[afronaut]

been writing in my bedroom 4 so long, i 4got wat tight iz (nowadays kids think 50 cent iz tight so im tryin 2 avoid that shit) . Im tryin to master narrating in rhyme(all boosting my story telling techniques)  All i need iz sum commentary, good bad f*** it jus holla. rite

afronaut
THE STORY OF NURSE SINDY

Here’s Nurse Cindy
Sweet little thing that looked pretty
Toiled on the 4th floor at psychotherapy
She had two colors and
She wasn’t even aware
One was dark as hell
Other was light as glare
Either way her purpose was
Blind to human stare
Never knew her world
She didn’t even care
Her main priority
Was to marry a millionaire
Who would save her
From those horny stares
She received from the aids patients
She refused from those cancerous
Denied from other nurses
Female in birth organ
She had a pure heart
The other heart was evil
Both juxtaposed to hide
The other that was skillful
To her knowledge
She was herself
Smiles like archaeologists
That uncovered a hieroglyph
They thought didn’t exist
And other was
The devils lady
Big fan of ouija
Fit to have a fit
And sacrifice those
She truly admired
Like vanishing babies
on flyers
or like the atom collection that choked
on a rosary in the theatre
never knew he was a friar
Til she checked his papers
Weeks later
What a coincidence
There were many incidences
even when guilty
She still maintained her innocence
Till one day
A crazy had entered the office
And the doc asked for a gla** of non-toxins
A drink to wash his throat
So she ruled out coke
Took a sniff
Walked to the kitchen
and never spoke
poured a gla** of tapwater
took a sip
thought she heard her mothers speech
spoken as a little girl
scared and struggling for air
she pa**ed out
on a flea ridden couch

Woke to an itch
began to scratch
picked up the gla**
then hovered pa**ed
the scientific lab
raised the gla**
and saw another dimension
it couldn’t be time
because it was evil
blood on the walls
corpses of people
fire on hospital beds
fresh vomit puddles
bubbling with stomach acid
she felt it was hard to swallow
like Lake Placid
so she blinked in disbelief
lowered the divine water gla**
from the wrath of her sight
a perfectly normal hospital hall
smelled of antiseptic
minutely inebriating her mind
so it’s probably just the atmos
whispered nures Cindys lips
she had to rea**ure herself
and replace her concious
she inhaled for extra calmness
and lifted the gla** tabooley
and now she was at a mirror
that bled through its cracks
blood from a bad luck era
Same colour as that baseheads
She thought
A tinge of purple the most beautiful blood
processed by the devils skinflutes
in the mirror she saw
an amplification
of her reflection
the long blond hair was tapeworm
the pretty lips were bloody
the beautiful eyes were muddy
the pure skin
was covered in whale fat
component powdery
that’s not me she thought
thank god
when the lips in the mirror synched
a f*** you at the nurse
and laughing began
she thought she was cursed
she dropped the gla**
and the water possessed her flesh
numbed her left leg
arm neck and her breast
began to leak purple
seen through the nurses dress
shocked to see her 2nd dimension
physically on her
she felt the dead skin
covered in acidic pimples
beautiful she whispered
but in another voice
the one she heard laughing
before the metamorphosis
her physique was half-masculine
she had rippling left biceps
firm and hard as a wall
reinforced with titanium
though her body was half numb
the evil decided to move
stole a scalpel from the refuse
and headed to the theatre room where
a solitary collection of atoms
lay there frozen
numb on local antiseptic
so she cut off his scrotum
her good half was fighting
but not enough to stop the evil
she cut open a nut
and poked it with a toothpick
smiles of sadism
tears of tension
she decided from one side of the mouth
raised the tortured ball
and fed it to her mouth while
at same time
the patient awoke from his coma
took one look at the bitch
and realised a lack of mojo
while she bloodied her teeth
with uncooked scrotum
he screeched
pain came sudden
terrified back to sleep
she awoke the faint prisoner
with her right arm
smacked him on the cheek
poked his eyeballs
then proceed to piss on his
unconcious body
security came through the door
alarm rang loudly
but her manimal instinct kicked in
and bust through the wall with her body
holding her scalpel
a scrotum leaving a dead body.

[RuSh]

dang man u took the whole nite to write that?

[afronaut]

not really

jus hooked up a whole o my writes on disc as backup ( u kno wat its like livin wit a mother who thinks your satanist.

2nd reason is coz im on that fruityloops wanna b producer than.
i heard a wack beat done by sum living legends dude and d-cided to relese the shit i been doin. Coz that shit waz my test run.

whatya think o the piece tho

[nawdiZ]

different..
i like
peace

[Anonymous]

I can see why yo mother thinks you a satanist :-]

I love it tho....

Mara´D [maradee]

[General In8]

Dog u... I don no..... that was deep. Very deep.

Ya that about sumz it up. I don blame ur mother.
:-D

[RuSh]

 :-o

[afronaut]

thanx for da props n shit.
maybe i am satanist :-Y  :-Y  :-Y  :-Y  :-Y :-Y
one

[fahfee]

I always wanted to ask someone who considers themselves a satanist,  does it mean their atheist?

cause atheist means that you do not believe in God, but then that means you will also not believe in satan cause its all from the bible or torah?

or do people call themselves satanists just to be "ill" and/or to piss of christians?

?

[RuSh]

any satanist up in here?

[afronaut]

i figga sum say it 2 b ill n piss off christians. i say it jokingly but then again i say alotta shit. :-)

[RuSh]

hey whats up man how u doing?

[afronaut]

im aight. jus tired as shit. watchu cookin in p.e. :-]

[fahfee]

Quote:

02-08-2003 at 20:10, afronaut wrote: i figga sum say it 2 b ill n piss off christians. i say it jokingly but then again i say alotta shit. :-)

ha ha

but I need someone qualified to answer my question

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[SOYA DADDY]

i love it..its very,very,very good.Nice concept.at the begining i thought you were trying to be like breezly brewin of the juggaknots when they did loosifa..but your shit is original.you should record this,make sure you got a gloomy tight beat.